Contest: Spot My Bad Grammar And Win A.R.E.S. On Steam
If there are two things that I know people like on the internet, its free stuff and correcting bad blogger grammar. So when I came across two copies of A.R.E.S.: Extinction Agenda I devised a brilliant plan (at least I thought it was brilliant) to combine those for the ultimate giveaway. That's right, all those years of posting typo corrections in blog comments will finally pay off!
So hear's the deal: I've purposefully written this contest article quite badly. You've probably already noticed that by now and are pulling your hair out at my blatant disregard for proper syntax. Well, if you'd be so kind as to post in the comments correcting just one error, than you could win a copy of A.R.E.S. on Steam. I have two copies to give away, so tomorrow I'll be picking two commenters (whom have given valid grammar corrections) to be the winners.
And in the mean time, why not check out our review of A.R.E.S. and read up on the game you're trying to win. Good luck, and happy grammar hunting!
NaviFairy
Posted to Hot Stuff, Video Games on 4 February 2011
· Comments (27)
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That "its" in the first sentence is missing the apostrophe.
The second word of the second paragraph should be "here's" not "hear's".
Whom isn't valid in that context, use who.
"...than you could win a copy of A.R.E.S. on Steam."
Should be "then."
"So when I came across two copies of A.R.E.S.: Extinction Agenda I devised a brilliant plan"
There should be a comma between Agenda and I.
If you do something on purpose (not by accident), you do it purposely. But if you have a specific purpose in mind, you are acting purposefully.
"And in the mean time..."
I think you meant "meantime." Mean time is the average time, or a time that is nasty.
"That's right, all those years of posting typo corrections in blog comments will finally pay off!"
Might be wrong on this, but I believe that's a run-on sentence.
"That's right! All those years of posting typo corrections in blog comments will finally pay off!"
"And in the meantime" - sentence shouldn't start with a conjunction. "In the meantime" is quite adequate!
(on a sidenote, I'm slightly disappointed at the glaring omission of a "your/you're/yaw/yore" error)
Near the end of the second paragraph, the "whom" should be "who" as it is functioning as the subject of the phrase.
I just need to say: I love you all. Some great finds, though there are still some more that I haven't seen anyone mention (and probably some more that were unintentional, I didn't really proofread this article for obvious reasons).
I could be wrong here, but in:
So when I came across two copies of A.R.E.S.: Extinction Agenda I devised a brilliant plan (at least I thought it was brilliant) to combine those for the ultimate giveaway.
I think you should add something behind those to refer to what you're actually combining.
For instance:
So when I came across two copies of A.R.E.S.: Extinction Agenda I devised a brilliant plan (at least I thought it was brilliant) to combine those two for the ultimate giveaway.
Especially if the two things you're combining are the two things people on the internet like, that you mentioned in your previous sentance.
The first sentence in the last paragraph (the one that ends in "read up on the game you're trying to win") should end in a question mark.
use "who", not "whom".(my personal pet peeve along with less and fewer)
its is possessive, it's is it is. In your case, you need the apostrophe.
This post was nearly incomprehensible with so many mistakes.
I'll go with the hypercorrection: "whom" should be "who."
"... free stuff and correcting bad blogger grammar."
That sentence lacks a parallel structure.
"... getting free stuff and correcting bad blogger grammar."
"So hear's the deal" should be "So here's the deal".
In the first sentence, "its" should actually be "they're" since your pronoun's antecedent ("two things") is plural.
I can't believe I remember that shit. 6th grade all over again. (sentence fragment)
"As much as I enjoyed A.R.E.S., it was a disappointingly shorter than I had hoped"
The word "a" is superfluous to this sentence. Either that, or a word like "game" or "experience" should be added after the word "shorter".
If I were writing this, I'd say one would be pulling their hair out -over- your blatant disregard. Unless you are literally predicting we commenters are going to throw our hair at you.
That said, I see that sort of thing often enough that I'm not sure if it's actually incorrect.
First sentence.
"...its free stuff and correcting bad blogger grammar"
It should be "it's", not its, with an apostrophe.
Two things:
1) So hear's the deal: I've purposefully written this contest article quite badly.
Other than the obvious spelling error, you've used a colon incorrectly. It should be a comma, because you are separating an introductory phrase from the rest of the sentence.
2) than you could win a copy of A.R.E.S. on Steam.
To keep with the rest of the article, the title of the video game should be in bold. This is to make sure that the article is consistent in style, and to clarify that the game is a proper title.
badly --> poorly
So, who won? :D
I'm obviously the winner. In fact, I've won both copies of the game because my answer was so cool. NaviFairy just hasn't said anything yet because he's trying to figure out a way of letting you all down gently.
Hellooooo Navifairy!!!
Inquiring minds still want to know who won.
Lest you thought to weasle out of your own competition?